I grab the entire ocean and throw it across the earth, draining all that is evil from their helpless souls. The sun turns into a deep blue and the now violet flames touch the essence of all trees and fool the earth into its own demise. Suddenly the grasp is relieved of life, and all imagination fails, leading greatness into death. The earth is dead. Decaying, and has no hope. But out of this a phoenix arises flowing its power o'er the earth. And the earth sings as life is breathed back into it, the trees essence arises, and life is once again is restored. The phoenix is the life and the life is proclaiming the sun as its hero, looking onward for pasts peace..

o.o
I dunno

Did you write that?

yeah i was talking to my girl and that came out

I think it's well written. Setting aside some grammatical errors, the metaphors used are well used, the symbolic importance of the phoenix is nicely portrayed, and the overall message of this is concrete. We are destroying our world, and someone does need to step up and put an end to it, once and for all [the phoenix].

Well done, Xero.

Posted By Marc on 10th Jan 08 at 2:22am

 

I think it's well written. Setting aside some grammatical errors, the metaphors used are well used, the symbolic importance of the phoenix is nicely portrayed, and the overall message of this is concrete. We are destroying our world, and someone does need to step up and put an end to it, once and for all [the phoenix].

Well done, Xero.

yeah, glad someone sees me as an artist. I hate how people think I am just stupid, I'm really only just conceptual.

Posted By XeroCint on 10th Jan 08 at 2:15am

 

I grab the entire ocean and throw it across the earth, draining all that is evil from their helpless souls. The sun turns into a deep blue and the now violet flames touch the essence of all trees and fool the earth into its own demise. Suddenly the grasp is relieved of life, and all imagination fails, leading greatness into death. The earth is dead. Decaying, and has no hope. But out of this a phoenix arises flowing its power o'er the earth. And the earth sings as life is breathed back into it, the trees essence arises, and life is once again is restored. The phoenix is the life and the life is proclaiming the sun as its hero, looking onward for pasts peace..

o.o
I dunno

The essence of hope screams in agony. For all is not what it seems. Shadows that dwell between light and dark swell, grow, and evolve into a cataclysm of catastrophic proportions - a maelstrom of escalating disaster - that rips the heart of the Earth, rips it out from the core and shatters it against the falling darkness. Starlight ebbs out and fades away as ghosts of past sins surge out from the pit of infinity and envelop the Earth and all that she holds in her bosom. Fire rains down from the sky, burning the Phoenix in never-ending cycles of birth and death.

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Posted By slip on 10th Jan 08 at 6:40am

 

Posted By XeroCint on 10th Jan 08 at 2:15am

 

I grab the entire ocean and throw it across the earth, draining all that is evil from their helpless souls. The sun turns into a deep blue and the now violet flames touch the essence of all trees and fool the earth into its own demise. Suddenly the grasp is relieved of life, and all imagination fails, leading greatness into death. The earth is dead. Decaying, and has no hope. But out of this a phoenix arises flowing its power o'er the earth. And the earth sings as life is breathed back into it, the trees essence arises, and life is once again is restored. The phoenix is the life and the life is proclaiming the sun as its hero, looking onward for pasts peace..

o.o
I dunno

The essence of hope screams in agony. For all is not what it seems. Shadows that dwell between light and dark swell, grow, and evolve into a cataclysm of catastrophic proportions - a maelstrom of escalating disaster - that rips the heart of the Earth, rips it out from the core and shatters it against the falling darkness. Starlight ebbs out and fades away as ghosts of past sins surge out from the pit of infinity and envelop the Earth and all that she holds in her bosom. Fire rains down from the sky, burning the Phoenix in never-ending cycles of birth and death.

[/random lit]

well done

Thank You

You wrote very well as well